I love how precise and visceral the descriptions of june 11th are, they make the poem feel very much live. I also adore june 17th, there is something almost brutal in how short it is and how much it leaves open to the viewer. great job!
thank u for reading ryo, it rlly warms my heart to hear ur perspectives! ;__; <3
oh gosh you're right! it is... i haven't been on in a few days sorry, i'll try to fix it!!
I absolutely love your vocabulary and the imagery you paint through it, very evocative!
wow, this was so cool and visceral and interesting to read... your word choices are sublime!!! - j
I really like the contrast between the reverent tone of the piece and the visceral imagery scattered throughout, I think it works really well!
right there with u brotherrrrrrr 🙂↕️