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Talk:Göran Lagerberg

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Vacant0 in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Vacant0 (talk · contribs) 17:50, 2 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Hi! I saw this article on the GAN backlog. I will start the review a bit later. Cheers, --Vacant0 (talk) 17:50, 2 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

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General

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  • Although optional, you can add {{short description}} and {{Use dmy dates}} at the top of the page. Infobox is properly set-up.
  • Unlink the third-party link from Blond in the lede. The rest of the lede satisfies the criteria.
  • "Always being musically interested, he started attending piano lessons at the age of six, attending the same school as Danne Larsson." → As a kid, he was interested into music and started attending piano lessons at the age of six, attending the same school as Danne Larsson.
  • My recommendation would be to group a couple of sections: Under a new section called "Music career" you should put "Tages" (remove early years and later years subsections), "Blond", "1970s and 1980s" and "Grymlings".
  • Missing end quote in the first sentence under "Early years" section. → "he was the only guy insane enough to play the washboard".
  • "Unlike many other Swedish groups, who had one lead singer, the members of Tages were each was allowed at least one lead vocal per show, often harmonizing." → Unlike many other Swedish groups, who only had one lead singer, the members of Tages were each allowed to lead the vocals at least once per one show, often harmonizing.
  • "...wasted on a flexi disc, thanks to Lagerberg's talent." – are you sure that this is meant to say wasted?
  • Missing comma between November and Tages in the "In November Tages third studio album Extra Extra was released." sentence.
  • Add "to" between Parlophone and expire in the "...allowing their contract with Parlophone expire..." sentence.
  • Unbold "Blond" in the "Blond" section.
  • Uncapitalize progressive rock in the "The group came out of the Mecki Mark Men and initially had a Progressive rock sound." sentence.
  • Move the end quote on the left side of the period in the "..."one of the 50 best Svensktopp-songs of all time."" sentence.

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Sources

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  • Move the only-remaining source from the lede to the third paragraph in the "Later years" section.
  • "His work with the group would be postponed until he graduated in June 1965." – unsourced.
  • Sources are alright. Discogs is tagged as unreliable since some complained that it is user-generated and not appropriate, if there are other reliable sources that can replace those two then find them, otherwise, they can be kept.

@VirreFriberg: I'm putting this article on hold for a week. If these issues get fixed I will promote it to GA. Cheers, --Vacant0 (talk) 15:14, 3 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

@Vacant0: Done. --VirreFriberg (talk) 12:09, 6 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Promoting. I've removed the other image because the video isn't tagged with a CC 4.0 license. Vacant0 (talk) 12:20, 6 January 2022 (UTC)Reply