nice story hope its continued so far to the point of this review its a awesome game and im quite enjoying reading i keep the awesome work up edit:theres a huge amount of customization and alot in the story as i progress through it i love this game already and the ros are very nicely written and different from each others Great job dev
Bug found. The prince Nikon heart interactions are flipped. Choosing one gives the opposite reaction. The look away has MC smile, while smile has MC look away. These two: You feel your heart speed up. You weren't expecting to get a reaction. You look away quickly ❤️ -- Your heart races and in the face of the unexpected attention you take the chance to give your most charming smile ❤️
The vampire kingdom be (rightfully) crowning you right away like it’s a bargain while the elf kingdom getting too intense over the political and succession drama, I love them both lmao. Makes me quite curious about the history of the parents with each other as well. Anyway, Theome, I’m gonna win you over 🥺
Love it and I love the vampires more than elves due the fact they like you more but I do like your character being half of both and having physical and magical power and have both you parents hair and eye color at the same time love it and my fav love is vampire second-in-command >3> I think my mc he and him will get alone very well >///<
This is really good so far, I'm thoroughly intrigued and can't wait to check out more. ❤ Your writing is also very good for someone who's first language isn't English - nicely done!
Just one bug I came across. I played as a cold/stoic male MC, but got this: "While waiting for the decision you think about your heiress destiny. Two kingdoms. Yours. But you can only have one, well, at least that's what they say." 'Heiress' should be 'Heir' as my character is male ('Heiress' is female). I guess the coding didn't recognize the MC's gender here?
Also, I really like that cold male bookish elf (his names starts with N), but as I'm playing a cold/stoic and confident character who cares about politics and power, and thinks they don't need anyone (but is intrigued by N and his motivations, and hopefully that will lead to romantic interest further on), I didn't choose the flirt options as they didn't fit. Instead I chose the option that is most in line with my MC's personality, which is warning him not to turn his back on a prince, and to respect me. (Oh, just to add in here, I really loved that part of the story, it was really well-written and fit perfectly for my cold MC). I sort of imagined a sexual tension there too, but I think that was just wishful thinking. LOL. Basically, will there be ways for more stoic/cold character to show romantic interest in their own way (usually unwillingly, sometimes accidentally, sometimes even borderline threatening because they don't know wtf they're feeling and it bothers them)? Mostly because the usual bold-and-flirty or shy-and-stuttering options really don't work with a cold/stoic character, but obviously I love the idea of rivals-to-lovers and would love to romance someone with this character. And cold/stoic boys need to get their awkward interest across too. 😄Just wondering!
Oh, and on the note of romance. I told the best friend character that I was only interested in political marriage. In truth I would have loved an option not to answer and instead to change the subject, or to say that despite the urgency it's not a priority in their mind just yet, as my MC isn't forthcoming like that (and also is using their 'best friend' lol). I did originally choose 'not interested in marriage', but the tone of the reply didn't fit my MC, and I was also afraid that might lock my MC out of marriage later on or something? My MC would definitely marry for political reasons above all else right NOW, but my MC doesn't know what it's like to love someone yet, at which point his opinion would probably change quite a bit.
For RO's, so far there is one non-binary character (the best friend), two male characters (cold bookish elf and tough vampire second-in-command) and one female (mercenary). We haven't met the last one yet (I don't think?).
The Vampire path seems the most accepting and welcoming of the MC so far. Quite the usual role reversal, I like that, though this definitely needs better proofreading, there's a few misspellings and grammar mistakes that I saw...
I almost laughed when I saw the main difference between the two kingdoms. While elves either don't want you to be heir at all or want you to be their puppet. Vampires just give you a crown straight away.
I am inlove. I got to the last bit of the demo and said dammit when it ended. This story is wonderful and i am so excited for it. Praying to the writing God's it doesn't end up in the pile of forgotten abandoned novels on here. You are a good writer. I'm so damn excited for this story to continue. Well done!!!
Thank you so much for your words ♥️♥️ I am in the process of writing the update and hopefully soon there will be a process here 🖤 (Sorry for the delay in responding to your comment 🖤)
Thank you for your comment ! I'm editing the demo so I hope this bug is fixed in the next update (actually I just fixed it now :) thanks for letting me know)
Holy cow! This is rough and needs a beta, but aside from the technicalities, the story drew me in instantly and I already adore the characters and hate that I can't choose more than one option. I loved the sibling hang out as much as the awkward 2 sentence exchange with N. And I want the pillows AND snacks. But I chose and the story went on and while the directly opposed sides are clear, you are per design stuck in the middle. It's awesome and I can't wait how our protagonist might be able to spin this! I hope you find one or two dedicated beta readers to help you edit and refine this gem to truly shine!
Thanks for your review! I'm new to the world of coding, so for now, there are not many things I can put (but I'm working on it!) by the way, are you available to be a beta reader? 🤣 Jk... unless...?
there's a writer's lounge with all kinds of IF writers to share resources or try for betas etc. there. I'm not very good with deadlines and take way too long for most people to do the beta, but you might have better luck making some connections there? If you can't find anybody via tumblr or discord, you can message me again, but as I said, I'm very slow, so I'm reluctant to agree and then probably disappoint.
Until now, nothing. But thank you very much! Your opinion has already helped a lot and I'm editing the demo and implementing some functions following a template I found around here. Also, thanks for your honesty! 🖤
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This. Is. Amazing.
nice story hope its continued so far to the point of this review its a awesome game and im quite enjoying reading i keep the awesome work up edit:theres a huge amount of customization and alot in the story as i progress through it i love this game already and the ros are very nicely written and different from each others Great job dev
This is the type of content ivé been searching for, for WEEKS!!!!!
love it can't wait for more👍 ❤❤🌹
Love the premise of this story. Very interested to read more and see where this goes.
Bug found. The prince Nikon heart interactions are flipped. Choosing one gives the opposite reaction. The look away has MC smile, while smile has MC look away. These two: You feel your heart speed up. You weren't expecting to get a reaction. You look away quickly ❤️ -- Your heart races and in the face of the unexpected attention you take the chance to give your most charming smile ❤️
Yay! Thanks for reply.
The vampire kingdom be (rightfully) crowning you right away like it’s a bargain while the elf kingdom getting too intense over the political and succession drama, I love them both lmao. Makes me quite curious about the history of the parents with each other as well. Anyway, Theome, I’m gonna win you over 🥺
Thank you for your comment !! I'm working to deliver the update as quickly as possible!
Oh no, thank you for your hard work and please take your time! It’s gonna be worth it anyway 👑👀
Aww! I never thought of half-elf and half-vampire!! I want to see how the story goess!!
Thanks :) There will be an update soon!
I think I already know who my main will be :-[
👀 I can't wait to know!
Update? :<
Soon!!
omg I’m already invested!!
Thanks :)
What an intriguing IF!!
I'm completely engrossed in the fascinating story, and I never before considered the possibility of an elf-vampire child 😳.
Despite the incredible start, there are a few typos, but everything else is fine.
I can't wait for more ✨
Thank you so much :) I hope to fix everything for the next update
<3
Damn I can't wait for updates on this story it's so good to read ^^
Thank you!!! I can't wait to deliver the update!
I'll be here waiting for those lovely updates on this storyline I hope it's fun and dramatic 😋
Can't wait to see more. So excited
Thank you! More coming soon !
Oh wow, this is really interesting. Can't wait for more.
Thank you :)
Love it and I love the vampires more than elves due the fact they like you more but I do like your character being half of both and having physical and magical power and have both you parents hair and eye color at the same time love it and my fav love is vampire second-in-command >3> I think my mc he and him will get alone very well >///<
I'm very happy with your comment :) there will be an update soon!
i love this already! I look for more in future!!
Thank you!! More to come soon!!
This is really good so far, I'm thoroughly intrigued and can't wait to check out more. ❤ Your writing is also very good for someone who's first language isn't English - nicely done!
Just one bug I came across. I played as a cold/stoic male MC, but got this:
"While waiting for the decision you think about your heiress destiny. Two kingdoms. Yours. But you can only have one, well, at least that's what they say."
'Heiress' should be 'Heir' as my character is male ('Heiress' is female). I guess the coding didn't recognize the MC's gender here?
Also, I really like that cold male bookish elf (his names starts with N), but as I'm playing a cold/stoic and confident character who cares about politics and power, and thinks they don't need anyone (but is intrigued by N and his motivations, and hopefully that will lead to romantic interest further on), I didn't choose the flirt options as they didn't fit. Instead I chose the option that is most in line with my MC's personality, which is warning him not to turn his back on a prince, and to respect me. (Oh, just to add in here, I really loved that part of the story, it was really well-written and fit perfectly for my cold MC).
I sort of imagined a sexual tension there too, but I think that was just wishful thinking. LOL.
Basically, will there be ways for more stoic/cold character to show romantic interest in their own way (usually unwillingly, sometimes accidentally, sometimes even borderline threatening because they don't know wtf they're feeling and it bothers them)? Mostly because the usual bold-and-flirty or shy-and-stuttering options really don't work with a cold/stoic character, but obviously I love the idea of rivals-to-lovers and would love to romance someone with this character. And cold/stoic boys need to get their awkward interest across too. 😄Just wondering!
Oh, and on the note of romance. I told the best friend character that I was only interested in political marriage. In truth I would have loved an option not to answer and instead to change the subject, or to say that despite the urgency it's not a priority in their mind just yet, as my MC isn't forthcoming like that (and also is using their 'best friend' lol). I did originally choose 'not interested in marriage', but the tone of the reply didn't fit my MC, and I was also afraid that might lock my MC out of marriage later on or something? My MC would definitely marry for political reasons above all else right NOW, but my MC doesn't know what it's like to love someone yet, at which point his opinion would probably change quite a bit.
Anyway, great job so far! Keep going!🍀
Thank you for the tips! I'll see what I can do to improve this!
Love how all the characters so far are interesting! Can't wait for more<3
Thank you :)
Love it can't wait for more 👍
Thank you! The update comes soon!
What kind of romances are there in this game?
There are five possible romance options
•Friends to lovers. (1)
•Rivals to lovers (2)
•A very intense and strange kind of soulmates (1)
•An almost annoyingly slow burn (1)
No, I meant M/M, F/F or M/F?
For RO's, so far there is one non-binary character (the best friend), two male characters (cold bookish elf and tough vampire second-in-command) and one female (mercenary). We haven't met the last one yet (I don't think?).
All romances are MC-sexual, I assume.
The Vampire path seems the most accepting and welcoming of the MC so far. Quite the usual role reversal, I like that, though this definitely needs better proofreading, there's a few misspellings and grammar mistakes that I saw...
I really like the demo 💞
I almost laughed when I saw the main difference between the two kingdoms. While elves either don't want you to be heir at all or want you to be their puppet. Vampires just give you a crown straight away.
Yeah 😂😂 They are like water and wine... Thank you so much for your comment 🖤🖤
I am inlove. I got to the last bit of the demo and said dammit when it ended. This story is wonderful and i am so excited for it. Praying to the writing God's it doesn't end up in the pile of forgotten abandoned novels on here. You are a good writer. I'm so damn excited for this story to continue. Well done!!!
Thank you so much for your words ♥️♥️ I am in the process of writing the update and hopefully soon there will be a process here 🖤 (Sorry for the delay in responding to your comment 🖤)
there was a few problems in the library where N gender flipped completely, but it’s a good story so far. do you have tumblr?
Thank you for your comment ! I'm editing the demo so I hope this bug is fixed in the next update (actually I just fixed it now :) thanks for letting me know)
My Tumblr is: https://www.tumblr.com/nirawrite-holab-if
Holy cow! This is rough and needs a beta, but aside from the technicalities, the story drew me in instantly and I already adore the characters and hate that I can't choose more than one option. I loved the sibling hang out as much as the awkward 2 sentence exchange with N. And I want the pillows AND snacks. But I chose and the story went on and while the directly opposed sides are clear, you are per design stuck in the middle. It's awesome and I can't wait how our protagonist might be able to spin this! I hope you find one or two dedicated beta readers to help you edit and refine this gem to truly shine!
Thanks for your review! I'm new to the world of coding, so for now, there are not many things I can put (but I'm working on it!) by the way, are you available to be a beta reader? 🤣 Jk... unless...?
writers-resources
there's a writer's lounge with all kinds of IF writers to share resources or try for betas etc. there. I'm not very good with deadlines and take way too long for most people to do the beta, but you might have better luck making some connections there? If you can't find anybody via tumblr or discord, you can message me again, but as I said, I'm very slow, so I'm reluctant to agree and then probably disappoint.
Until now, nothing. But thank you very much! Your opinion has already helped a lot and I'm editing the demo and implementing some functions following a template I found around here. Also, thanks for your honesty! 🖤
I gotta say Both kingdoms It would be the right move it would give people a chance to see the other sideAnd what its qualities are
I totally agree with you!